jakebe: (Writing)
Prescott's ear twitched as he looked down at the paper before him. He had written words and numbers on it, all laid out in a nice little chart. The source of income or expense in the far left column, and money going into his bank account in the middle one. At the far end went all the money that left his bank account for whatever reason, from the beginning of the month until now. At the bottom, the balance in his checking account, as it stood now: $-87.33.

He stroked his nose, from the twitching tip up to the top of his eyes. It soothed him to be petted, even if he was the one doing the petting. And right now, it was the only thing keeping him from having a small panic attack in front of all these nice people inside Zia's Cafe on Allegheny. He double-checked and triple-checked the numbers. It simply couldn't be right.

His phone buzzed. He plucked it carefully and read the text message displayed on its screen. Now I know why you wanted me to buy you lunch.

Prescott looked up and gave the man sitting across from him his best disapproving stare. When you were a six-foot tall walking rabbit, that only worked so well. Vitaly merely smiled back at him, hunched in his comically undersized chair, cradling the comically undersized phone in his massive hands.

To each other, they looked as they truly were. Prescott was the perfect blend of rabbit and man, with big brown expressive eyes, oversized buck-teeth hidden under a blunt and boxy muzzle, a thick coat of white fur covering his entire body. He favored baggy jeans and a light sweater this time of year; his fur was more than enough to keep him warm, but he couldn't walk around naked when most people couldn't see that he was keeping modest. Vitaly was an enormous blue troll of a man, thick white hair forming a mane that nearly hid the small horns and pointed ears that still managed to poke through. He had an underbite to match Prescott's overbite, thick, sharp canines jutting up from his lower lip. He wore simple and sturdy clothing, blown up large to contain the impossible, ancient strength that was his birthright. He had learned restraint by living in a world made far too small for him, and had come to have the patience of mountains.

To the cafe's other patrons, they were merely an eccentric couple -- a hulking man who was constantly texting, and a strange younger fellow carrying out what looked to be a one-sided conversation. They came here together every Wednesday. The smaller man ordered for the larger one, and he had an odd, jokey way of talking. It was simultaneously hilarious and frustrating.

Prescott rarely told the truth outright after he came upon his true nature. It was the birthright of his kind, apparently, and it made simple conversations rather interesting affairs more often than not. He did his best to at least make it entertaining to decipher the truth, but that only went so far and inevitably people got fed up with trying to puzzle him out. Vitaly was the only person who knew what he was getting at most of the time, and that was an immeasurable relief to him. In exchange, he served as the troll's translator so his muteness wouldn't make things weird for anyone. They were the best of friends, and they fought often enough to prove it.

Today, Prescott was too nervous about his bank account to really give Vitaly a good rejoinder. "Ha. Very funny. I'm overdrawn in the first place because I bought lunch for you last week. You could have stopped after your tenth sandwich, you big ox."

It was a lie, and they both knew it. Vitaly simply smirked and tapped away on his undersized phone. It was nothing short of magic that he was able to type anything with those fingers the size of soda cans. I know I could have. But it was more fun watching you sweat.

Prescott allowed himself a small smile. "If you think it's fun watching me sweat, you have a pathetic and incredibly boring life."

Vitaly shrugged, then ate the last quarter of his sandwich in one quick bite. Prescott looked down at his balance sheet and sighed. His ears folded as he thought about the bills he still had to pay. Money had never been his strong suit.

"I have everything under control, of course. My student loans are well in hand, and so are the utilities, and I certainly won't make a late fee on the credit card. I know you think the negative in front of my balance looks bad, but really, it couldn't have come at a better time. I'm in excellent shape." Prescott's heart raced as he thought about it. Where could he get the money?

His phone buzzed. Is no worries. I give you $500 now, and you pay me back over time, OK?

Prescott looked up, stunned. "But you make even less than I do. I mean, you're practically a peasant! Where did you get that kind of money?"

Savings. I save while you buy video games and hair dryers and what not. This is interest-free loan, pay back when you can. But I help you budget your money, yeah?

The rabbit's whiskers and ears lifted. "I don't see what help you could possibly be, but I suppose it couldn't be the worst thing."

No, worst thing is borrowing money from Brendon. He lords it over you until the end of time. Lucky for you, it's just me. Vitaly smiled, then reached over and grabbed the other half of Prescott's sandwich in those big fingers. The troll sniffed it, made a face, and then ate it anyway.

Prescott snickered and rolled his eyes. It's amazing how money in one's bank account could lift your spirits. "Arrogant grand-standing is far better than some lummox eating you out of house and burrow, that's for sure."

They both laughed, then, Prescott loud enough for the two of them.

(This week's prompt was balance, and I wanted to take it to a different place than most people would have thought of. Balancing a checkbook can be rather boring, but...I thought for these two it would fit rather well.

Prescott and Vitaly are two of the Three, a group of characters who find new Sleepwallkers and help them with the realization of their true nature. I really love the idea that they both find basic communication challenging for various reasons, and rely on each other to make things a bit easier. Prescott is the mouthpiece for the group, and all the twists and turns and verbal rabbit-holes can be useful in their line of work. When he needs to be earnest, he can trust Vitaly to decipher what he's actually trying to say. Vitaly, for his part, can't speak at all. For him, those tiny cell phones are a god-send. Also, I never get tired of seeing giant people trying to use tiny gadgets.

That being said, trying to figure out how Prescott and Vitaly actually speak to one another -- and to 'civilians' around them -- is a bit of a challenge. I know that I'm not a good enough writer to really pull it off yet, so I want to get in a lot of practice. They're fun to write, anyway, so expect to read a lot of these guys in the future.)
jakebe: (Writing)
Hello all!

Here are a couple of excerpts for the stories I've been working on. The first pair are from "Sleepwalkers", the Changeling: the Dreaming-inspired setting I've been mucking about with for years. The third and final excerpt is the first page of "Bird" in rough-draft form. Nervous about all of these, and I'd appreciate feedback.

As always, if you'd like to pledge a bit of money for the Clarion Write-a-Thon, my author's page is here.

Sleepwalkers Excerpt #1
It was so exacting, was the problem. Math was limiting in a way she could not accept -- it reduced the world to hard, fixed numbers, narrows a reality of endless possibilities into one right answer. Finding it was a maze, a thicket of dead ends and cunningly laid traps that felt better than the truth. And what did you get after all of that work? A set of numbers or letters arranged in just the right way, meant to represent something else. It just didn't move her. What could you do with that? Knowledge was only as useful as its application, and knowing the right answer only seemed to apply in a single specific situation. With everything else, knowledge opened up the world. And that was what she had so desperately wanted.

Abby sighed and focused. The numbers and italicized letters stared up at her, an alien language that she saw no use for translating. She began trying to work out an equation in her head when she felt a buzz crawl up her spine. That was her signal that he was here. He was early.

"You're going to need to solve for x tomorrow." His voice was high but proper, each syllable rolled in a way that made plain how much he savored them. Abby called him the Gnome, and she had no idea where he came from. He would simply appear, and she would argue with him about things she could never remember the next morning. He would tell her when to get to bed, and promise to keep her safe. When she woke up, he was gone.

She never questioned whether or not he was real, because it didn't really matter. He made her feel safe; that's what mattered. At 16, she was a little old for imaginary friends, but she didn't care. She needed all of the friends she could get.

Abby turned in her chair took look at him. He was short, around three feet tall, with an oversized head with exaggerated eyes, ears, and a potato-shaped nose. His skin was earth brown, his eyes were the color of amethyst, his hair clouds that he made the attempt to fashion into shapes. He wore the clothes of the peasant class in the Middle Ages, but they made him look all the more dignified somehow. His enormous glasses perched over his nose, magnifying a concerned expression. The Gnome stared solemnly at her. Then he looked out of the window.

"He's coming," he said. "I...know that usually means bedtime. But I think it's best if you and I took a little walk tonight. We'll leave through the window."


Sleepwalkers Excerpt #2
He looked at himself in the rear-view mirror, glancing at his bright red hair and pale face before shifting it. The back seat was taken up mostly by a hulking blue man with small horns jutting from his forehead and small, sharp tusks jutting from his upper lip. In what space was left squirmed a giant bipedal rabbit. He grumbled as he tried to make room for himself. “I always hate this part.”

“Quiet.” The driver spoke softly but firmly. Both the blue giant and the rabbit turned to look at him through the mirror. “We have to make sure we know our jobs. We’re only going to get one shot at this.”

He looked away from the mirror. “I’ll go in as a visitor, saying I’ve come to see Aunt Mim. Prescott, you’ll hide in my pocket until I give the signal. Vitaly, you’ll be waiting at the courtyard entrance for the alarm. When it sounds, break down the door and go to the girl’s room. Fourth door on the right down the hall. Smash in, grab her, get out. Leg it into the woods and wait for me. It should take us an hour or so to get out, but we’ll come. In the meantime, see if you can get the girl to talk.”

The giant shot him a look that was both dubious and long-suffering. The driver sighed. “I know. But do your best. You’re a good listener, Vitaly. Use that.”
The rabbit grunted and elbowed Vitaly, who seemed not to notice. “I don’t fancy being stuck in that place with you for any longer than I have to be. It’s not like we’ll learn anything new by being on the inside.”

The driver smiled at Prescott. “Exactly. We can use the time we’re in there to scout. Should make it easier to break in next time.”

Vitaly glowered. Prescott grinned. “Right, because they won’t change their security measures once they found someone’s smashed through the back door and taken one of their patients. It’s brilliant.”

“If you have a better plan, I’d love to hear it. The place is surrounded by iron. We’ll be lucky if Vitaly’s strength holds out long enough to break down a couple of doors.” The driver turned in his seat to look at them. Vitaly was a plain man, big but not overly so. He was dressed in a scuffed pair of blue jeans, a flannel shirt and leather jacket. Prescott was a thin man next to him, dressed in a suit that would look dashing on most but just looked rakish on him. His hair was a mane of sandy blond. His overbite made his oversized front teeth stick out over his lower lip. “I don’t need to tell you what would happen if we leave this girl trapped in this place any longer. We could lose her.”


Bird Excerpt #1
It’s a verifiable fact that most of the people in this world are too stupid to live. Really. All it takes to prove my point is watching people when they don’t know they’re being watched. Where do they look? Most of the time it’s at a point right in front of them. But they’re not actually seeing anything — they’re looking past that little spot of air they just happen to be resting their eyes on. They’re really just thinking about something. What? Something small and immediate, I’m sure. Whatever’s right in front of them.

You can tell if someone’s worth being interested in by watching how often they look up and around at the world around them. The more they do it, the higher they look, chances are the more they think of the world outside of themselves. And those are the people you want to have conversations with. Because they’re thinking expansively. They know they’re not the center of the universe. Heck, they’re probably not even the center of their own lives. They’ve made room for something bigger — an idea, a goal, someone or something else that they’re willing to move over for. And that’s pretty cool.

What do you see if you look at me? Eh, about half and half. I’m not ashamed to admit that I spend as much time being selfish as I do thinking about something that’s worth thinking about. The difference between me and most people though is I admit it. I know when I’m being stupid. And I strive to be better. When I graduate and spend eight or ten years in college getting my doctorate, I hope I come out the other side something like my dad.

It’s mushy, I know. But my dad is one of those people who’s always looking up. He’s made himself such a small part of his own life that he gives himself over completely to what he’s passionate about. His job, Mom, me. Not a lot of people have parents they can be proud of — let alone ones they can like — but my dad…he’s my hero. He’s the guy that I was born to be. And screw you if you think that’s lame.

The thing is, I have a long way to go. I’m a junior in high school, and yeah, I’m a straight-A student but that doesn’t mean anything yet. My dad’s smart and likable. I’m just an asshole with a perfectionist’s mind for getting the best grades. If I could encourage my study group to pull an all-nighter making the best chemistry presentation Woodside High has ever seen, then I’d consider myself a success. Most people see me as some high-functioning autistic. I’m useful for what I know, and not much more.

The problem is, I don’t mind being unpopular. Most of the kids in my class are deeply, deeply stupid. I don’t have the patience that my father does. I can’t lead them from where they are to where I am, and I’m not sure they’d like the view once they got there. It’s work, giving yourself over to something greater. It’s sacrifice. And most guys my age just want a car and a girl that they can ruin both of them in some secluded spot called “Make-out Hill”. Is that still a thing? I don’t know, but my point still stands.

Life is not something you waste just by living it. You have to examine it, smooth out the rough edges, make it something better. It’s what my dad believes, and it’s what I used to believe until just this evening.

Now? Screw it, I say. Nothing matters anymore. We’re all going to die in three months.

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